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  • E resume by eburd
    1 October 2008, 11:14 PM

    93.0
    Salary range is definately too low. How about 150k+? Good use of numbers as proof of your achievements. Strong experience & education.

  • My job by Andy Newport
    1 October 2008, 11:10 PM

    95.4
    Incredibly strong experience. Use of quant data as metrics of your performance as a leader is excellent. Experience in many areas inside a business operation is evident. Sales gains, expenditure reductions, great! Format and language are nice.

  • Costume Shop Counter Person by Godaisies
    1 October 2008, 11:01 PM

    75.4
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  • Recent Graduate in Business Analysis and Finance by Vivaldi
    1 October 2008, 10:59 PM

    66.6
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  • General Resume by mturnbull
    1 October 2008, 10:38 PM

    82.8
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  • Yana by yanatabakman
    1 October 2008, 10:35 PM

    75.4
    Too long bulleted lists. Besides that, they don't have any quantifiable data of your achievements. Recruiter can not get a clear picture about you just based on responsibilities. Use bold text in job title-line to improve readability.

  • Bookkeeper/Accountant by carolinafl56
    30 September 2008, 12:02 AM

    81.0
    Objective is too general - lose it.

  • Business Student Resume (internship seeking) by guenv001
    25 September 2008, 11:16 PM

    83.0
    Good stuff. I see no problem - that education is impressive enough and your extracurriculars are solid.

  • McKinney Russell - Problem-solver, consultant and entrepreneur by mckCave
    25 September 2008, 11:14 PM

    92.2
    Very impressive content and well-polished look. Effective use of quantitative data as job/leadership performance metrics. Use of 3 pages is justifiable.

  • chris connors by chrisconnors
    25 September 2008, 11:10 PM

    79.3
    Too big font, too much spacing. Format needs work. Try to reduce length (skills-section uses 4 times more space than it should) - recruiters want to skim through as few pages as possible.

  • Toral by toralshah
    25 September 2008, 11:04 PM

    82.2
    I would like to see achievements listed in experience-bullets. Responsibilities tell only what you did/should've done - not how well.

  • Highly experienced Training and Development Manager by ldonvito
    25 September 2008, 11:01 PM

    84.0
    Ok. Only some minor problems with format.

  • Jamie Connors by jamesconnors28
    22 September 2008, 05:48 PM

    72.8
    Too much content. Trim down and try smaller font. 2 pages max. Include year in education.

  • cris092208 by crisskupen
    22 September 2008, 05:45 PM

    78.8
    Way too much text. Readability is low - key data is not easily available. Most recruiters won't take the time to read this through. You have a lot of key highlights, which would shine on their own. Trim down! Include years in education.

  • HM by guimion11
    22 September 2008, 05:42 PM

    86.8
    Well-polished resume.

  • IT Application Programmer 1 by llonden
    22 September 2008, 05:40 PM

    85.6
    Very nice resume.

  • Instructional Designer by Mike Futuba
    19 September 2008, 04:35 PM

    80.5
    Don't waste space. Work experience and education are those things recruiter is interested in. Those should come out on top. Lose the 2nd page. Recruiters will ask for references if they want them. Add any quant data and achievements to those bullets in work experience. Those are worth their weight in gold as recruiter can assess your capabilities from them - which can't be done from job titles & lists of responsibilities.

  • Lee Crittenden CV by crittz
    18 September 2008, 05:34 PM

    68.8
    Use whole page. Work experience can include non-paid jobs. Or then just fill that skills/activities-section. Work experience should clarify what you achieve and also list some of your responsibilities. Now I don't know what you actually did.

  • Generic by ospadano
    18 September 2008, 05:29 PM

    84.0
    Format could look better. Content is good.

  • Brandy Nagel's resume by brandynagel
    18 September 2008, 05:26 PM

    83.8
    You should redo that sabbatical. If you supported family businesses and freelanced, you still got work experience. You can provide employer names and what you did for them in the same way as "real jobs". PS. That bulleted list is too long. Use bullets in other sections as well (nancy bailey & your current one), not that mix of plain text and bullets.

  • GOBIG2 by GOBIG
    18 September 2008, 05:22 PM

    86.5
    Very nice resume. Your finance internships provide a good background.

  • Web Designer/Graphic Artist by nosacredcows
    13 September 2008, 06:07 PM

    67.2
    Much work needs to be done. Lose summary and stick with the professional experience-section. Adopt bullets (easier to read). Include achievements, not just responsibilities. If you can provide quant data, that would be good.

  • nduncan by nduncan71
    9 September 2008, 03:07 PM

    80.7
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  • Hosay's Resume by Hosay
    9 September 2008, 03:04 PM

    85.2
    Ok. Too general objective (thus not useful). No need to mention US citizenship (US address & education).

  • my resume by ryant291
    9 September 2008, 03:00 PM

    73.8
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  • Computer Program by btarkieltaub
    31 August 2008, 02:11 AM

    63.6
    Summary goes on top. Tech quals might be merged into it. I'd rename it though to skills. Don't you have any (work) experience? It doesen't need to be paid - it can come from hobbies around open-source projects etc. If you actually have none, add extracurricular activities. Otherwise the resume will look too slim.

  • revised resume by morrisonjw
    31 August 2008, 02:07 AM

    87.7
    You should have some quant data from your days at operations manager in Bentley. Please add if you do. Very nice overall.

  • Sales, Operation and Business Development Executive by duke25
    31 August 2008, 01:51 AM

    85.8
    Too long paragraphs. Recruiter would like to only skim through a resume. I suggest trimming down those lists. Your basic language is very effective with use of quantifiable accomplishments. Work experience and education are also very strong. Readability is actually the only thing which can be improved.

  • resume by CaseyH
    28 August 2008, 09:18 PM

    83.7
    Very nice, only minor flaws.

  • Information Technology Specialist by scofi1ts
    28 August 2008, 09:14 PM

    82.0
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  • Project Driver, Business Analyst, Innovator by gmpelton
    27 August 2008, 06:55 PM

    87.2
    Professional affiliations-section bit too long compared to your professional experience bullet lists, which are the core of your resume. Add some achievement-oriented bullets.

  • MyResume by wd_stroke
    27 August 2008, 06:44 PM

    74.8
    Turn those plain text sections into bulleted lists. Recruiters like to skim, not read through. Key data needs to be highly visible. Use also bold text in headlines (e.g. in employer & job title). Remove salaries, you are just giving away your strength in negotiations. Total length needs to be max 2 pages.

  • 2008 Current by edgewood
    27 August 2008, 06:32 PM

    83.0
    Content in employment seems to be quite focused on responsibilities, when achievements would be more relevant.

  • normal by geekender
    27 August 2008, 06:29 PM

    82.7
    Too long. Max 2 pages. Achievements are key, then some responsibilities.

  • Learning and Development Manager by threyn
    26 August 2008, 01:50 AM

    86.0
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  • Meehan by MeehanK
    26 August 2008, 01:48 AM

    77.2
    Format not very flattering, but readable. Add achievements (quantifiable) from those jobs.

  • Financial analyst, business analyst, market researcher (focus on airlines industry) by GreenCardHolder
    26 August 2008, 01:45 AM

    89.8
    Outstanding. Just send this with personalized cover letter to aviation co's and other management/market research related job openings.

  • Paralegal Resume by mjbess2
    26 August 2008, 01:42 AM

    84.2
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  • Andrew Greenhut's Razume Resume by nightwaves
    26 August 2008, 01:41 AM

    90.8
    High performance-achievement laden resume. Can't go wrong with that.

  • SV_190808 by messhouse
    26 August 2008, 01:35 AM

    85.3
    Work experience is thin, but I guess your time was spent in research chambers (I guess you are lucky that at least your subject seems to be quite relevant). Work experience achievements are one-sided. Don't just focus on things that were key to completing your term paper. If you have any metrics in improving employer's processes or something which can be translated into money - listing them would be very beneficial.

  • Legal Resume by patchmonkey
    26 August 2008, 01:26 AM

    87.2
    List achievements not just responsibilities. And stay positive, according to your resume you are in excellent shape.

  • Finance/Accounting by afgpearl
    26 August 2008, 01:24 AM

    82.7
    Very positive.

  • Toadmonster resume by toadmonster
    26 August 2008, 01:23 AM

    80.0
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  • Karthik by karthik
    26 August 2008, 01:19 AM

    89.0
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  • Resume by jvortega
    26 August 2008, 01:17 AM

    80.3
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  • Tindall, Jennifer 2008 by jen10doll
    26 August 2008, 01:12 AM

    79.2
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  • IB/I-Mgmt Resume by migz24
    26 August 2008, 01:10 AM

    84.8
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  • Senior Manager by ToniKay
    26 August 2008, 01:04 AM

    86.5
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  • Experienced Leader in Quality Improvement, Training, Project Management and Operations by 317SAM
    26 August 2008, 12:58 AM

    85.7
    Functional resume. Ok. Format is nice. First impression was that there's only responsibilities - but actually there seems to be quite many performance metrics (which are key features of a successful resume!)

  • Event planning resume by Sheryl
    26 August 2008, 12:45 AM

    83.4
    Readable, total length is good. Content (of bullets) is unique enough to be interesting.

  • Val's Resume update by Val
    26 August 2008, 12:37 AM

    83.5
    Nice resume.

  • Sales & Trading CV by davideboninsegna
    21 August 2008, 09:32 PM

    79.4
    No high school info if you're applying for jobs in the USA. Length max 2 pages. Too bad that you don't have any related work experience. You badly need some to complement your impressive education (but since you're not yet graduated, get an internship now).

  • Accounting Resume by ucbearcatsay
    21 August 2008, 09:25 PM

    78.6
    Rename employment experiences to work experience and move it after education. Good format. Losing objective-section (can be stated in cover letter) could make up space for skills-section (which should be placed last).

  • IB Resume by liorshim
    21 August 2008, 09:22 PM

    89.8
    I see no problems. Fed, Gmac & insurances... good internships and some leadership experience. Good luck.

  • Community Gardens Coordinator by ryandwayne
    21 August 2008, 09:20 PM

    86.0
    Ok, a nice functional resume. Try bullets in 2nd page. Easier to read than plain text.

  • old resume by adakkak
    21 August 2008, 09:16 PM

    81.2
    Not best choice of font. Quite nice resume.

  • Val's Resume by Val
    21 August 2008, 09:14 PM

    73.0
    Ok, but I want to see bullets in that experience -section. Its the most important one. List achievements in those bullets.

  • Tyler's Resume by tchanfrau
    21 August 2008, 09:13 PM

    76.0
    High School info not relevant. Leave personal objective for the cover letter. Add some achievements in those bullets if you can think of any. Now they are all responsibilities.

  • PDF RH IT Manager by click
    15 August 2008, 09:51 PM

    82.4
    Nice. Easy read.

  • IB-Analyst by cjslax6
    14 August 2008, 08:25 PM

    91.8
    Impressive work experience with lot of achievement (nicely presented in numbers). You should be a top candidate. I see no problem with content or format.

  • TechManager by RobC
    14 August 2008, 09:57 AM

    78.3
    Bulleted lists are easier to read. Good experience. Format is acceptable. I'd like to see the descriptions more achievement than responsibility -oriented.

  • Davies130808 by motojime
    14 August 2008, 09:30 AM

    91.2
    Very good experience. 3 pages is quite acceptable as you're a senior executive. Format looks nice and is easy to read. Few glitches, like that hyperlink: Norway (remove). Then profile includes achievements and you use two different currencies? Should you convert them to one? Think about it.

  • Lindsay1 by lindsaysue12
    14 August 2008, 09:24 AM

    87.0
    Nice. Add a few achievements to those bullets so the whole page gets used.

  • Director, Product Management by rrestout
    14 August 2008, 09:11 AM

    94.4
    I like. Compact and easy to read. Good experience / education. Just change those arrows at education -section to ordinary bullets. You'll do fine.

  • Resume by Kat0811
    14 August 2008, 08:45 AM

    73.7
    I say too long profile -section. I'd like to see those claims getting proofs in work experience -section. Now there isn't any bullets listed. Achievements should be placed there.

  • My Resume by arris75
    14 August 2008, 08:43 AM

    84.0
    Good. Nothing important missing.

  • Business Student Resume (Internship Seeking) by guenv001
    14 August 2008, 08:39 AM

    90.0
    Format looks very professional. Bullets are solid. When you get more work experience you'll stand out even better.

  • Soon-to-be graduating computer science major by bdetweiler
    14 August 2008, 08:37 AM

    84.0
    Try leaving one row of space between objective and education (and aviation ops specialist & coldfusion consultant). Very good looking font and format.

  • RESUME by VINCENT
    14 August 2008, 08:33 AM

    84.2
    Education might be better after experience, since its already three years from graduation. Too many responsibilities listed in those bullets. Try achievements! Format is fine.

  • ResumeMichael2008 by singularapathy
    14 August 2008, 08:32 AM

    87.8
    I see improvement. Now it's quite ready.

  • Web 1 by charlielha
    14 August 2008, 08:17 AM

    75.8
    1 page resume - that's good length. You might want to add few achievement -oriented bullets.

  • Damon Wilder Carr by dwildercarr
    12 August 2008, 10:50 PM

    88.2
    4 pages is a bit too long. There's excess spacing to reduce the number of pages. Well thought out. Bullets include not only responsibilities, but achievements. Format is readable and quite stylish. Don't really fancy that top graphic (blue headline is quite cool though). Add a year to Columbia Uni.

  • Jack Events by jackroberts5
    12 August 2008, 10:42 PM

    67.5
    Lead -sections are a bit long. Don't see any numbers / actual proof of achievements. Try giving some. Where's your education -section?

  • My CV Rev June 2008 by digitalspaghetti
    12 August 2008, 10:24 PM

    71.7
    Don't think that those high school grades are needed. Just that you've completed it and year is enough. That way you can have a 2 page resume, which is maximum. 1 page resume would be better. Bullets would be easier to read than plain text. Open source experience is one of your best assets.

  • Sales Leader & Trainer by kcharman
    12 August 2008, 10:21 PM

    81.8
    Format is readable and professional -looking. Good use of achievements. Two page length is easy on the eye. No apparent typos.

  • Experto en uso de herramientas Libres by necudeco
    12 August 2008, 10:18 PM

    84.3
    Try having 1 page or then use at least half of the other page as well. I'd like to see achievements (what you did, how did it improve company's bottom line) in those bullets along with current responsibilities.

  • Jim Ellison by jimellison
    12 August 2008, 10:16 PM

    86.3
    Very good format. Nice compact length (but you should use most of page 2 as well, or it doesen't seem very well thought). Try adding some achievement -oriented bullets with quantifiable data (money/time saved/gained, percentages) Include a year of completion in your education.

  • stephen maser resume by stephenamaser
    12 August 2008, 10:12 PM

    85.3
    Format is good, bullets are solid. Total length (1 pg.) is optimal.

  • Sales Management by GreggMarshall
    12 August 2008, 08:32 AM

    96.3
    Textbook case. Excellent experience and education background. Superbly quantified/presented achievements. Lead profile is also concise.

  • Fall 2008 by abaren
    12 August 2008, 08:30 AM

    81.4
    Format good, experience/education is there. Could expand bullets with more achievement -oriented approach (quantify!)

  • Razume by jeffwiggins
    12 August 2008, 08:26 AM

    74.0
    Education + experience quite limited, but with incrementing steps it will get better.

  • August 2008 by carolyn
    12 August 2008, 08:19 AM

    79.8
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  • CV Mark van Hussen - Online Product Manager by hussen
    12 August 2008, 08:12 AM

    87.8
    Content-wise one of the best in a while. Achievements are presented very well.

  • IT Technician by lyonrt
    12 August 2008, 08:03 AM

    74.8
    Two pages is maximum. Smaller font, reduced amount of bullets - whatever. Recruiters won't be reading more than that.

  • Profile by springer
    12 August 2008, 07:57 AM

    69.3
    Don't use I, me etc. Performed, created etc. is the right way to go. Education missing!!!

  • Copywriting Resume by JustinSmith1986
    12 August 2008, 07:53 AM

    75.8
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  • razume1stdraft by dzazzle
    12 August 2008, 07:49 AM

    81.4
    Too long cover letter, otherwise fine. Quite limited work experience, but passion is apparent. Good luck.

  • Multimedia Journalist, Visual Thrill Seeker by toryhargro
    12 August 2008, 07:40 AM

    83.2
    Quite unusual format. Might be ok, as this is a creative position. What are you trying to say with your Social media -section? Ok, web 2.0 savvy it might be needed in your field, but aren't those mastered in seconds by anyone trying?

  • Resume by DLevine
    11 August 2008, 04:47 PM

    89.0
    Very good resume. Good use of numbers as a measure of achievement.

  • Marlin Casey by marlincasey
    11 August 2008, 04:44 PM

    85.2
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  • Updated resume by hilmy83
    11 August 2008, 04:43 PM

    85.8
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  • LADRESUME by ladoorly
    11 August 2008, 04:42 PM

    90.7
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  • Chris Strom - August 2008 by Marketplicity
    11 August 2008, 04:41 PM

    84.8
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  • Health Educator by nmd
    11 August 2008, 04:41 PM

    60.4
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  • Dan Rodriguez Interactive Marketing by tubbynj
    11 August 2008, 04:40 PM

    75.8
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  • woodhouseresume by woodhouseresume
    11 August 2008, 04:39 PM

    57.4
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  • My Resume by zapnap
    11 August 2008, 04:39 PM

    79.2
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  • ManojResumeAug08 by manojattal
    11 August 2008, 04:37 PM

    58.2
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  • IT Resume by dagsmith
    11 August 2008, 04:37 PM

    70.8
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  • Administrative Support Online by ryandwayne
    11 August 2008, 04:36 PM

    71.0
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  • Arts Management Professional by jonathoncarrington
    11 August 2008, 04:36 PM

    61.8
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  • Greg de Lima's Resume by gregdelima
    11 August 2008, 04:35 PM

    74.5
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  • Graphic/Web/UI Designer by harshada
    11 August 2008, 04:34 PM

    17.5
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  • HR by HARockwell
    11 August 2008, 04:34 PM

    85.0
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  • Hard worker in Salem, MA by starrking
    11 August 2008, 04:32 PM

    49.2
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  • Baisc Resume for TV by bradyusi
    11 August 2008, 04:31 PM

    84.8
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  • Lisa Banks by stcrazyhs
    11 August 2008, 04:31 PM

    72.0
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  • Coffey, MBA by ralexco
    11 August 2008, 04:30 PM

    69.4
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  • Project Manager version 1 by fyi2
    11 August 2008, 04:29 PM

    70.8
    Education missing.

  • Information Technology Specialist by Celephias
    11 August 2008, 04:28 PM

    53.0
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  • Primary Resume by Kolya Miller
    11 August 2008, 04:27 PM

    74.8
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  • 2008 OCI by sebrenner
    11 August 2008, 04:26 PM

    81.2
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  • Barbara Samuels by bubblemonkey23
    11 August 2008, 04:25 PM

    70.2
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  • 2008 Current Resume by JasonJalen
    11 August 2008, 04:24 PM

    75.2
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  • Supplier Quality Engineer by David Jasnos
    11 August 2008, 04:23 PM

    79.7
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  • CAPL398A - Susiehomemaker by lholleman
    11 August 2008, 04:22 PM

    77.0
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  • Prod Comp NY by kcolker
    11 August 2008, 04:21 PM

    85.0
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  • Junior Accountant by do0dles
    11 August 2008, 04:21 PM

    73.7
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  • Jeremy by rbtm2006
    11 August 2008, 04:19 PM

    79.2
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  • Application Developer by razzme
    11 August 2008, 04:19 PM

    73.0
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  • EddeBu's resumé by EddeBu
    11 August 2008, 04:18 PM

    68.2
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  • Work2 by Fullduplex
    11 August 2008, 04:17 PM

    81.5
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  • jr_Resume by johnsonraj
    11 August 2008, 04:17 PM

    71.8
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  • IT Project Manager by ericnils
    10 August 2008, 02:47 PM

    88.0
    Very nice resume. Good achievements (savings!) - nicely quantified. PS. How are you going to prove that "able to remain calm and focused during a crisis"?

  • Organizational Facilitator-Problem Solver by aarong
    9 August 2008, 06:37 AM

    75.7
    Format could be improved. Quite good content.

  • A resume by James Ming
    9 August 2008, 06:32 AM

    82.8
    Try founder rather than just innovator, which to me might suggest that you only came up the idea and didn't execute it yourself. Did you do them with your own company behind it (if yes, that should be listed), or were those just independent sites. That founder + exit is buried deep. I almost missed it. You should highlight that in your profile! No zen jargon, just state that you founded a business and sold it for hefty profit! That will turn the recruiters socks.

  • CAPL Resume by CAPL - Sydney
    9 August 2008, 06:27 AM

    79.2
    Use less space between sections and you have a 1 page resume + 1 page cover letter. Trust me, that matters. PS. Font size not consistent.

  • Innovative digital strategist by dianas
    9 August 2008, 06:22 AM

    90.7
    Good approach. You don't make the beginner mistake of just listing your responsibilities. Really heavy names in your previous employers. Some bullet lists seem to wind up getting quite long. Only problem with the format is that there seems to be no apparent consistency whether you have a space after the bullet or start just after it. Couldn't find any typos.

  • Marketing Support by allibumbali
    8 August 2008, 01:34 PM

    83.0
    OK

  • vehvilainen by jarkkove
    8 August 2008, 01:27 PM

    88.0
    Tervehdys! Savonlinnassa itsekin syntynyt (sinä taidat olla Säämingin Punkaharjuun liitetystä osasta). Choose format depending on which country you are targeting. This CV should be used only for Europe. It's not best choice for the US (would require removing picture etc.). German -speaking countries are generally only places where picture is preferred. For US market, I'd recommend 1 page resume following our best examples. Work experience first, education next, skills last and nothing more. Bullets with heavy achievement -orientation. Please clarify whether you'd like to have a resume for US market or Europe so we can move on.

  • Aug. 6, 2008 by benjuang
    7 August 2008, 07:39 AM

    73.3
    Work experience -section should be first if you've already graduated. Expand bullets in job experience. They are 100x more important than rest of your resume. List your best achievements from those jobs.

  • Sr Software Engineer / Technical Lead by schnieds
    7 August 2008, 07:30 AM

    76.7
    It looks stunning but is too extensive. Two pages. That's all the attention recruiter will give. It starts to go skewed right at the gate, when skills -section takes up almost one full page. Resume is in itself a brief, so it should cover those things mentioned at current 1st page in 1 or 2 pages. Regarding work experience, bullets are too heavily leaning on responsibilities. You should list your achievements. Even the guy who gets fired from a job had the same responsibilities - the measure is in ones achievements.

  • Restaurant Resume by airsnail
    7 August 2008, 07:22 AM

    85.8
    That bookkeeping skill is only one worth mentioning. Others are apparent by looking at your work experience. Good 1 page resume!

  • Old September 2004 resume by imsaar
    7 August 2008, 07:18 AM

    71.7
    Too long. This would fit into one page, and then no separate section for highlights would be needed. Smaller font, less spacing etc. Your bullets are good, that's the main thing. Just heavy work on format is needed.

  • Mark Poole by mark
    7 August 2008, 07:14 AM

    61.3
    Very long. 4 pages wont be read. 1 or 2 pages max. Try a new format and use an achievement -oriented approach in describing your work experience. Seek inspiration from our top rated resumes.

  • Technical Resume by errcw
    6 August 2008, 02:55 PM

    80.3
    Puzzling... you present your achievements in volunteer work better than your professional experience. Transfer numbers, percentages etc. concrete evidence -approach to your professional experience -section.

  • Main Resume by befrirave
    6 August 2008, 01:02 PM

    77.2
    Can't really make heads or tails about your performance / achievements in those jobs. All I get is responsibilities. You should list key achievements with quantifiable data. Numbers, percentages. Money saved, gained...

  • Main by dustingoldman
    6 August 2008, 12:58 PM

    78.7
    Crew chief -job should include more bullets. Its 5 years of work!

  • My Resume by ceonyc
    6 August 2008, 12:48 PM

    86.3
    Format not very pretty, but at least it's easy to read. Nice use of numbers. Good balance of achievements / responsibilities.

  • 2008 by jokarrm
    6 August 2008, 12:42 PM

    76.8
    Try including performance assessments in those bullets. Use numbers - time/money etc. savings/gains matters to the recruiter. Bolding employers or job titles might improve readability.

  • Christopher Jones resume by jonesybk
    6 August 2008, 12:37 PM

    67.0
    Format could be improved. Some overlaps etc. See included captions.

  • Resume 4 by James PinsonCAPL398A
    6 August 2008, 06:58 AM

    79.2
    See included bubbles.

  • Studio Resume by dustyfanz
    6 August 2008, 06:13 AM

    83.3
    Light on experience, but since you are just trying to get an internship... You should try to include some kind of a (music) portfolio to succeed in your job search quest.

  • New Resume by ryangeist
    3 August 2008, 02:25 PM

    90.8
    Very good base, but resume contains only one job and covers about three years of your life (+ed). Any favorable co-curricular activities from GWU? These would widen the scope of your skills/present. This minimalistic approach might work. But some like me might also wonder that why am I getting so partial picture about this person. Maybe this will increase the mystery and boost chances of getting an interview.

  • Management Consulting Resume (Graduate) by consultant_2_b
    28 July 2008, 03:29 AM

    81.7
    Achievements in wrong place. Work experience should be FIRST! Needs shortening. Max 2 pages. Try making a leadership -section and include relevant data there (some from current achievements -section)

  • My Resume by Bubble Shield
    28 July 2008, 02:24 AM

    74.8
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  • Test by AndrewLee
    9 July 2008, 08:03 AM

    85.7
    It could use a one sentence long summary at the top. That way your unique experience with Publi.us / Fantasycongress.com would be noticed by even the hastiest reader.

  • Michael is the man - hire him! by koofme
    9 July 2008, 07:53 AM

    82.8
    Base format is quite good. Overall lacks some punch. Perhaps objective replaced with summary, where you highlight key achievements with Koofers would interest recruiters.

  • Computer Network Administrator / technician by Smith
    7 July 2008, 06:22 AM

    78.7
    See included speech bubbles.

  • resume by sue
    27 June 2008, 10:34 AM

    82.5
    Bullets could be improved (see included speech bubbles). Good format.

  • max's resume (college senior) by maximousprime
    25 June 2008, 12:50 AM

    83.8
    Bullets include nicely quantified performance assesments All is there, base format is good, just iron out the details. Should fit into 1 page or then use at least half of the other page as well.

  • Andras Resume by andras
    25 June 2008, 12:39 AM

    77.5
    Try including sections like Work experience, Education and skills.' Your summary (Designer | Creative...) could include a small teaser -section, where you would try with one or two of your hallmark achievements (eg. list few of those BIG name clients and what you did for them) to secure recruiter's interest. Take a look at top rated resumes for inspiration. This has all the ingredients, readability is only lacking.

  • Resume for New Position by CEH
    21 June 2008, 07:16 PM

    84.7
    Good format, with minor flaws on execution. Rename Additional information to Skills. Publication is not very relevant to International Affairs, but ok. Try justified text. Objective is very general (useless) - try writing a one sentence summary (where you point out your most useful skills). You'd make an excellent advisor on how to write a resume. Try reviewing at here :)

  • IT Professional by ourskool
    21 June 2008, 07:08 PM

    88.5
    Very good. Format is excellent. Bullets are mostly filled with hard data... Regarding education: What are your degrees?

  • Project Manager by jksaa
    21 June 2008, 02:54 AM

    88.2
    Textbook case -format. Congrats. Bit longish when there's normal text and then bullets... Some obvious info could be removed (like telling about what Lockheed Martin is/does...)

  • CAPL_Anton Rasmussen's Resume by berkleeanton
    19 June 2008, 06:17 PM

    85.2
    I would rename objective to summary and include one sentence, which would describe what you can offer. Eg. Senior intelligence analyst with tac-team leadership experience from over 100 convoy ops (your rare persian-farsi + cultural knowledge should also be included in this sentence, if possible) Then I'd rename qualifications to achievements and would bring one or two highlights from your experience -section there to help lure reader further.

  • fflr by fflr
    19 June 2008, 06:01 PM

    73.3
    Way too long. You are presenting 10 jobs in 3 years. Take two steps back. If you need to list them all, list them in a functional way. Eg. make a section, titled "media experience". List all related jobs (nothing but employer and date, then next row) then combine the best achievements from ALL of those in bullets under them (achivements -section under profile can still stay there as a teaser). Next section could include all other experience, listed in a similar way.

  • Business Development Resume by Adam12
    19 June 2008, 05:12 AM

    84.0
    Justified text and dates aligned a bit further to the right might also help. Education -headline should be more prominent (bold) and leave one row of space. Selected accomplishes are very good. Summary is weak compared to them. Do a bit of juggling and include those numbers into your summary. I'd throw out all descriptions about employers (Verticalnet is...) - Google will help the recruiter if he/she wants to know. I'd use bullets all the way through resume (not in summary could be written open).

  • June '08 Resume by amanda013
    18 June 2008, 08:43 PM

    73.7
    Your bullets consist of responsibilities. Unfortunately responsibilities tell nothing about what kind of a performance can be expected from you. List out job achievements - numbers are very helpful. Use typography to your advantage. Bold job title and employer - so they become easier for the eye to find. Summarizing skills section should be added. On top. Or bigger (including computer experience) to last.

  • FranklinCAPL by CFRANKLIN_CAPL
    17 June 2008, 03:51 PM

    77.2
    comments...

  • Hendrickson#1 by hendkcapl
    17 June 2008, 03:35 PM

    65.0
    Format has exploded. Provide summary instead of objectives (a weak one currently that is - show enthusiasm!). Bold every job title / degree and work place. It helps reading. See examples from top rated resumes. Eg. this one and it's critique should guide you: http://razume.com/resume/view/969

  • Florida Job Seeker by aeroschewskiCAPL
    16 June 2008, 12:22 AM

    73.3
    Personally I don't like those 6 boxes. Just a format issue. I get a whole lot stronger feeling about skills -section than profile. That's weird. Profile is very much lacking compared to skills. It shouldn't , because it's placed at the top.

  • Investment Banking by maksim
    14 June 2008, 08:35 PM

    84.2
    Promising.

  • Entertainment Industry Consultant by JLScharr
    13 June 2008, 02:48 PM

    82.2
    Typography is really nice. Format easy on the eye. Text is really compact and still all important data is there. Lot of thought has been put into this. I think that this format could work well in entertainment industry. If you have time to spare, please consider giving help to others by reviewing some resumes. Your skilled insight would be valuable.

  • Education Resume by CAPLJenniferC
    13 June 2008, 02:41 PM

    74.8
    Typography needs work. Use bold text in titles. Overall: very good.

  • Greg's Resume by gmlevine
    13 June 2008, 02:37 PM

    70.7
    Transfer from plain text to bullets. Use quantified data (numbers, very easy to understand) and describe your performance highlights, not job responsibilites. You should try getting inspiration from Razume's top rated resumes.

  • Marketing/Graphic Design Resume by CAPLZimmermanC
    13 June 2008, 02:34 PM

    75.3
    New grouping of references frees up space. You could use some of it to add white space on top of the page. Use of white space is an art among graphichal designers. I think that you don't use it enough. You could try typing section titles in CAPS (objective, qualifications, education, work experience and references). Easier on the eye.

  • C.N.A. by CAPL A.N.HOCKENBERRY
    13 June 2008, 02:27 PM

    72.5
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  • capl_marco_petrucci by capl_marco_petrucci
    13 June 2008, 02:21 PM

    77.7
    Format could be improved. Look for inspiring examples from our top rated resumes.

  • Tisa's Functional Resume by CAPL Tisa Dantzler
    13 June 2008, 02:15 PM

    75.3
    Excellent typography. A bit unorthodox format, but easy on the eye. Though some bullet lists extend quite too many rows. 3 pages is quite much, but passable.

  • IT Manager by davidalf
    13 June 2008, 02:08 PM

    78.2
    Replace blue (links) with bold text. Quite good.

  • Wendy Williams by CAPLWENDY
    10 June 2008, 02:11 PM

    67.0
    Your resume could fit into one page and cover letter would be left for another. Use bullets, combine date and job title or work place rows, fit your contact info located on top into smaller space etc. Then it could easily fit into one page. Can't comment on your education as you blanked just about everything about it. Include honors/awards, gpa etc. if applicable.

  • nychopeful by nychopeful
    10 June 2008, 01:45 PM

    80.5
    Format could use some more work. Good base. You could try looking/reviewing other persons resumes around here. It's a good learning opportunity and a source of inspiration, I can promise you that.

  • Resume 1 by buscando
    6 June 2008, 08:50 AM

    73.8
    comments...

  • Marketing/Advertising Resume by jbrown
    4 June 2008, 03:12 PM

    78.5
    Date presentation format is sloppy. Decide a place and stick with it. Text seem to be bolded in many places. You should print a sample and see what it looks like on paper. Assigning a bigger font size (than first rot) to 2nd or 3rd row of a paragraph looks odd (example: The George Washington University, Washington DC, Presenter & Distr...)

  • Resume 2008 by violet
    4 June 2008, 01:47 PM

    78.7
    First look: Quite technical. Emphasize entrepreneurial skills, teamwork, project management, financial etc. sides of your work experience. Now it's very heavy on communication (too detailed with all grammar, writing etc. mentioned separately) If applying for web admin etc. job, then resume heavy with WWW-skills is ok. Format is very good. Place technical skills -section last when applying for non-internet related jobs.

  • Bronx A.A. by mizz_apple_martini
    4 June 2008, 09:34 AM

    62.7
    Seems somewhat weak, which is a mystery when you have 15 years of experience. Those bullets under Administrative Assistant are in dire need of sharpening. You should improve the presentation of your skills/performance.

  • Legal Resume by cherman1
    3 June 2008, 10:11 AM

    92.7
    Resume seems fine. Format of four (legal, management, financial, logistics) logical sections - all involving management - is very comprehensive. Management -section could be better with one or two quantified performance highlights (like the one in your logistics experience: "Provided 97% on time deliveries..."). All in all, just speculating - resume is strong as it is.

  • Updated 1 by gayathri
    1 June 2008, 07:30 AM

    75.8
    Much better. Fit into two pages.

  • Event planner by newcomer2ATL
    1 June 2008, 07:15 AM

    80.8
    Very nice. You are seeking a career in event planning. How about making a section for your event planning experience then? Communication experience is generally ok title. But you have solid event planning experience listed there - so why not use a title fit for the job applied?

  • Administrative Assistant Resume by caseysousa
    1 June 2008, 07:03 AM

    60.8
    Your resume could fill more of the page (vertically). Dates are too prominent. They are less important than your employer /job title. So place dates last. If you can quantify your bullets, it would be helpful ("Streamlined shipping of products from two days to same day" is excellent). I would not use blue. Professional recruiters are somewhat conservative (except Advertizing industry)

  • general/first/after college by qumyafridi
    30 May 2008, 06:43 AM

    60.7
    Format is somewhat sloppy. GPA + Degree. All other important info is there.

  • Technical Resume by david.e.merritt
    29 May 2008, 11:47 AM

    62.0
    Good start. Less is more, but minor improvements could be made.

  • Industrial Engineering Resume by ma2008
    26 May 2008, 11:42 AM

    66.8
    Too many sections. Few titles could be improved. Good one.

  • NonProfitResume by yeilyns
    25 May 2008, 02:35 PM

    84.0
    Excellent.

  • Revised resume by JonnyStrabler
    23 May 2008, 12:07 PM

    65.2
    Perhaps work experience and extracurricular activities should be separated (latter devalues the entire section). If it is not paid, it's still work experience. Work experience before education? your choice... if you consider that education is more impressive, then keep it as it is. If work experience, then substitute order. This has nothing to do with your resume, but having a job portfolio (concrete references) could be nice as you are in artistic/creative field.

  • Resume for Inventory Associate by darla
    22 May 2008, 06:12 PM

    60.0
    Job titles alone reveal nothing. Tell me more. What did you do, how did you fare? Use bullets. Career history should be renamed to Work Experience. Logical order: Company, job title, date(s).

  • BJ Resume 2008- Seeking Investment Banking Grad Role by bjeen000
    22 May 2008, 05:57 PM

    65.0
    Better. I'd still shorten extra curricular activities - it fills most of 2nd page, which is almost useless compared to first page. Try to fit all in one page. Even if you don't believe that you could do it - then just for fun. Then you can compare and see if it's too narrow and make adjustments. I predict that dropping out objectives and high school would free space for skills -section from the 2nd page, where extracurricular activities could be summarized with 2 lines... Voilà, 1 page resume.

  • Aerospace Resume by BAL
    21 May 2008, 06:51 AM

    73.3
    You've got some good work expericence. This section should be placed before education. Boeing (bold it, as you're already at Boeing and looking at jobs from Boeing) should be placed first after Work experience -title.

  • Asia-PAC I bank resume 1 by seem02
    18 May 2008, 08:04 PM

    68.7
    Don't really know whether your salary range is too conservative... give it some thought. Healthy self-valuation is a sign of good self-esteem. Slightly too high valuations can be negotiated, but too low expectations might fail you at the first steps of a recruiting process. BEng + BC is good combination of different skills, but people with Master's Degree could be systematically valued higher than you.

  • Resume Draft by jpo
    18 May 2008, 07:52 PM

    81.0
    Really neat resume. Any language skills, experience abroad? Any former superior can give a reference? Too low salary expectation? (I don't know what it should be, but healthy valuation, even slightly over is a sign of self-confidence).

  • Communications Resume by Lyle
    18 May 2008, 07:45 PM

    51.7
    Format is somewhat unprofessional looking (major in communication!). It should look slightly more polished. This looks as it would've been done really fast. Language skills? Experience abroad? Bottom-heavy. Whole content should be raised a few lines higher. Include contact info of a person who can give a reference of your work performance / personality. Former superior or someone similar.

  • Final Resume for Consulting Internships by danielvh
    18 May 2008, 07:37 PM

    60.6
    Great! When possible, one page resume is best. Use of grey bars / white space is great for readability. Perhaps some more space could be added between those parts as the page has lots of space in the bottom. Include contact info to your former colleague / superior (references) who can give a recommendation of you and your personality.

  • test by clinton2
    18 May 2008, 07:28 PM

    59.5
    Use more paragraphs. Remove either technical summary or environments from each of the jobs (useless double info). Typography could be improved. Where's your contact info - it must be on this resume as cover letter can get separated from this (then this can't be identified any more). If you've done same kind of things in many jobs, just leave the title. Simplicity is required as we can't focus on / remember more than a few things. You should make space for hobbies, language skills etc. other parts of you than just your professional background. Your personality should be displayed more through this.

  • AJW by ajw0812
    18 May 2008, 07:05 PM

    65.0
    Good use of simple, concrete achievements (eg. "decreased support costs $500 000..."), no jargon. Speak any other languages? Any work experience abroad? As a recruiter I'd be intrested about your failures and what you've might have learned from them. This should of course not be included in resume - but you might want to give it some thought. Not much personality is not presented through this. How about your hobbies - you might want to present yourself as a whole. Yes you have professional affiliations listed, but leisure is something I'd be interested in. What do you do to relax etc. Character witnesses? Recommendations from former peers, subordinates & superiors. Where are you going, what are you seeking. Favoured position does not tell much. Am I here for the money, challenge or what? What's my personal vision. These are somewhat off-resume matters, but my thoughts just wandered there. More white space could be used with this resume. 1984-1996 should be summarized in fewer words. 2 pages is maximum. Format is the main thing to improve in this resume.