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  • Laura Zahn International Resume by lorelei1231
    9 April 2009, 10:54 AM

    34.4
    You've got a pretty good outline here, but it's lacking all the crucial details. Fill in a few bullet points about what your responsibilities and duties were with each position you had. The Capitalization is inconsistent. Make sure you're starting every sentence with a capital letter. It would be worthwhile to spend a little while browsing through the top rated resumes here. It'll help give you a better idea of what you're going for.

  • My Resume by ruthlessgravity
    9 April 2009, 10:41 AM

    82.6
    Great resume! Excellent use of numbers and details. It really makes your experience shine! My one little nitpick is that you should list your dates as May '11 or May 2011. But not how you've got them currently.

  • Jamie by rustyred1
    9 April 2009, 10:33 AM

    53.5
    Jamie- This will need some work before it's ready to get you a job, but you're off to a good start. My biggest suggestion is cut this down to one page. Entry level positions don't require two page resumes, and it's just one more thing that can get lost or separated during the interview. I've marked things in red that you could cut to get down to a page.

  • Shaunie Resume by shaunielove
    9 April 2009, 10:24 AM

    0.0
    You've got a strong resume. There are a few ways it could be made better. Cut out the objective. This kind of info can go in your cover letter. Adjust the style for your education so it matches your work experience. I.e., bold Florida A&M University, and move the graduation date out into the left margin. And keep an eye out for lines where you just have one word on them. I've underlined three examples in purple.

  • Political Communications/New Media Resume by nsroka
    8 April 2009, 05:30 PM

    69.7
    Hi, it's Kyle. This looks good in my opinion. I've put some comments inline where I think the wording or language could be improved. Sorry to say it, but the design and layout isn't so hot. Browse through some of the resumes people have uploaded already and you can get some ideas for better formatting options.

  • Junior Graphic and Web Designer by alaughlin
    8 April 2009, 05:20 PM

    69.0
    I like the formatting that you've got going on here. My one suggestion would be to add some bullet points in the sections I've highlighted yellow. It'll increase the overall readability of your resume at a glance.

  • aResume309 by allies
    20 March 2009, 02:34 PM

    71.8
    Very nice looking resume! Good work.

  • PR/ Marketing Resume by 40deuce
    20 March 2009, 02:12 PM

    57.0
    It looks like the pages came through incorrectly, but first and foremost, you should cut this down to a single page. Just by decreasing the font size and the space between your lines, you can probably cut at least a page. I've got other comments in line. Overall, I think you really need to tighten the language. It's very verbose in describing things that could be put much more succinctly.

  • Amanda Kramer_Graphic Designer by amandakramer
    7 August 2008, 05:39 PM

    63.8
    Nice looking resume for a graphic design job. Not right for everyone, but you pull it off! Since you're fresh out of school your work experience isn't that strong. You should consider bolstering that section with stats like GPA (if it's above a 3.5), or other Activities you were involved with.

  • safety 2 by fire
    9 July 2008, 12:42 PM

    50.0
    The content is good. But you should work on tightening your language. Too many words!

  • Ann Reiman 2008 by ann.reiman
    9 July 2008, 12:20 PM

    0.0
    It looks like you've got some good experience here. But you'll need to do some work to make your resume a bit easier to read at a glance. I've included some specific suggestions on the resume itself. But here's the gist of it: You should find a way to make your bullet points punchier. One way you could make them better is by making the descriptions more concrete. That is to say, for your Apex-Time Warner job, the second point could read "Logged XX daily requests to support and billing systems". Or maybe include some info about what logging included.

  • Audio Engineering Administrative Assistant by cutchemist930
    21 February 2008, 03:29 PM

    54.2
    You've got a good start here hunting down a career. It sounds like you know what field you want to pursue, which is a great thing to know. Some of your descriptions of work responsibilities are a little long. If you have some extra curricular activities from college, you might want to consider listing them under your education header, along with your GPA if it is strong. Good luck!

  • Office Admin by paulg
    2 December 2007, 03:49 PM

    47.2
    This is a good rough draft, but there are a few spelling errors that don't reflect so well on your potential to be hired. Once you fix up the language, you should be in much better shape, though. Try reading everything out loud, and you'll probably find some of the places where you need to rewrite.

  • IT Systems Analyst by davidr
    30 November 2007, 12:56 PM

    49.7
    The overall formatting of this resume can be improved, and the language can be tightened up. There are lots of places where you've got descriptions that just barely spill on to two lines. By cutting a few words here and there and you can shorten this down to one page pretty easily.