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  • Internship Resume by Kmangan
    10 March 2011, 02:14 PM

    44.2
    Although early in your career and I'm sure that you feel experience is a disadvantage, you may need to create a summary statement/objective at the top of your resume - similar to the one you have on this posting, but targeted to a specific industry/organization/role. The reader should understand what you are looking for at this stage of your career, NOT that you just want an internship. Overall the format is rather generic and plain - consider inserting dividers between subject headings, increasing font size of header text, and/or using gray-scale shading to accentuate and draw some attention. a.) Education - List the name of your degree(s) - Bachelor of Arts, Sciences, etc. Perhaps also list the name of the college (example: College of Business). You mention complimentary course work, yet keep in mind this should also be relevant to the skills needed in the roles you are searching. You should also list your GPA (example: 3.6/4.0) - simply listing 'Dean's List' implies the same, but numbers attract. Maybe also list how many times you've 'achieved' this level of distinction. You have an objective statement under your education at Columbia - I would just list this degree separately underneath the primary major or mention in your resume's objective statement/summary. Also the coursework is empty - be consistent throughout your resume... since you mention in the above Fordham listing, either list here as well or omit in both. The reader should be able to understand how/why you are pursuing multiple institution degree's. Here is an opportunity to enhance your 'Skill/Activities' section at the foot of your resume. b.) 'Skills/Activities' - the current content seems more applicable to Activities rather than skills (reference above comments). Consider separating the two or renaming this section to something like 'Additional Experience' and/or 'Additional Information' and 'Summary of Skills and Interests' - if you do the summary, may be better positioned at the top of your resume. c.) Work experience - again consistency is important. You need to outline the results and responsibilities for each of your roles. Quantitative and qualitative bullets are important. I would also list these in chronological order - meaning that the Fordham Resident Technology Consultant should be listed first followed by the roles that were filled from Oct 2010- Jan 2011. I assume the positions provided some experience that would be valued by internet start-ups so use the opportunity to highlight this with buzzwords and other information that is important in this particular field.

  • resume by longhorns
    9 March 2011, 11:47 PM

    66.7
    1.) Highlighting your ACT score is irrelevant at this point in your career. Most industry fields/organization are primarily targeting your college GPA, leadership and internship/job experiences. The 3.5 GPA (Magna/Cum Laude distinction) should sell itself. 2.)Maintain consistency throughout - Stanford, CT and New York, NY to match format below with City X, NJ. 3.) Be professional and define your experience as an 'internship' rather than 'intern' 4.) Can you quantify or assess the value of your projects during your internship - numbers are attractive even if they are an estimate. 5.) Read through each of your experience bullets to ensure they address the situation, task, action, result (STAR). 6.) Minor note, but 103 children can probably be stated as 100 or +100... round counts and stats up/down 7.) Can you combine the country club experience or community activities since they seem similar? This will help you free up some additional space to maybe list a personal objective statement, profile skills summary, highlight key accomplishments, etc. 8.) The heading "College Community Activities" appears weak or incomplete with only a single item beneath - either list additional extra-curriculars or drop the section since similar insight/experience is shared in the previous 'Country Club' listing... this will also free up more space for the suggestions noted above. 9.) Skills and Interests need to be expanded otherwise I'm not sure they are serving much purpose - although the foreign language skill is extremely valuable/relevant... consider building this section out by targeting specific roles or industries where such skills or personality traits are relevant and will be more appreciated. 10.) Just to address the previous point again, since you are highlighting you're potential/expertise in the field of economics, I would suggest creating a personal summary/objective statement that gives the reader an idea of what you are looking to do - provides them with a sense of your goals/direction seeing as economics is a rather diverse field. You might also be able to compliment this section by mentioning areas of interest at the foot of your resume. This will likely maximize your potential to be hired, help with your search and provide you with a better assessment of your income potential.