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- Career Field
- Environmental Careers Environmental Engineering Nonprofit Sales
- Location
- Baltimore, MD Washington, DC
- Major
- Environmental Studies
- Salary Range
- $45-50,000 $50-55,000 $55-60,000 $60-65,000
how can you exceed store sales? Should this be store sales expectations?
You need more detail and need to keep things consistent, bullet-by-bullet.
Very nice sentence structure here. And well done quantifying your resume work experience.
You need to have more detail here. What degrees did you get? its unclear.
The line spacing is inconsistent throughout. You should update this to be consistent.
I would say something like "developed and conducted training" or "designed and implemented." Im not sure I would go into the specifics like "body language."
"Resulting in high rate of premium-line growth and increased business for regional distributors."
Exceeded
Rewrite this to "Launched new premium, high margin fixture line." You can add "including merchandising," but it may not be necessary
Again, Id like to see a stronger verb to start the bullet. "Initiated" is on the right track, but how about "Created?"
This looks a little awkward. I might rewrite to "Annapolis, MD and Bethesda, MD" and then put parenthetically which location you held each title after the title, below.
I dont understand how these two sets of dates are the same?
I would tighten this up a bit, and try to use a stronger word than "coordinated." How about "oversaw" or "responsible for"?
I think its fine to just say "Experience." I think that "work" or "professional" just adds unnecessary text.
Baltimore
I try not to use "UMBC," because Im afraid it makes people think its a community college.
Id reorder these with Environmental Studies on top. The dates are fine, although I would encourage you to put "B.A." or "B.S." or whatever it is you WILL earn, and put an anticipated date. (e.g. Anticipated 2009). If someone glosses over and thinks you already have the degree, thats their mistake, not yours.
The line spacing is inconsistent throughout. You should update this to be consistent.
I would say something like "developed and conducted training" or "designed and implemented." Im not sure I would go into the specifics like "body language."
"Resulting in high rate of premium-line growth and increased business for regional distributors."
Exceeded
Rewrite this to "Launched new premium, high margin fixture line." You can add "including merchandising," but it may not be necessary
Again, Id like to see a stronger verb to start the bullet. "Initiated" is on the right track, but how about "Created?"
This looks a little awkward. I might rewrite to "Annapolis, MD and Bethesda, MD" and then put parenthetically which location you held each title after the title, below.
I dont understand how these two sets of dates are the same?
I would tighten this up a bit, and try to use a stronger word than "coordinated." How about "oversaw" or "responsible for"?
I think its fine to just say "Experience." I think that "work" or "professional" just adds unnecessary text.
Baltimore
I try not to use "UMBC," because Im afraid it makes people think its a community college.
Id reorder these with Environmental Studies on top. The dates are fine, although I would encourage you to put "B.A." or "B.S." or whatever it is you WILL earn, and put an anticipated date. (e.g. Anticipated 2009). If someone glosses over and thinks you already have the degree, thats their mistake, not yours.
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Fireinthesky, very nice improvement over your prior resume. I agree, however, with ruthless, you need to pay more attention to your bullet point details. Exceeding 2006 store sales is not a very clear sentence. Focus on keeping your sentence length consistent. None the less, your format has moved in the right direction. I'd suggest doing some more research by viewing top rated resumes on Razume in your field. Additionally, make sure to request reviews on Razume from knowledgeable peers who could help provide more advice (use the email this resume box to the right of each resume), Best of luck.
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put education first since you want a environmental related position put most recent accomplishments first when talking about exceeding sales, increase the font of the stores so it stands out a bit more
don't ever put "hitting" on your resume unless your applying for a baseball position, and BE consistent because on the top you list the months at your job but in prior jobs, you only listed the year...
put education first since you want a environmental related position put most recent accomplishments first when talking about exceeding sales, increase the font of the stores so it stands out a bit more
don't ever put "hitting" on your resume unless your applying for a baseball position, and BE consistent because on the top you list the months at your job but in prior jobs, you only listed the year...
put education first since you want a environmental related position put most recent accomplishments first when talking about exceeding sales, increase the font of the stores so it stands out a bit more
don't ever put "hitting" on your resume unless your applying for a baseball position, and BE consistent because on the top you list the months at your job but in prior jobs, you only listed the year...