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How does participating in this constitute work experience? What was the campaign? What did you do for the campaign? What was the outcome?
Im not familiar with this form of dates. What is the decimal point and the tenths number mean? Is that the month? If so, I suggest removing that part.
Won 5th place "in" the competition at Fudan University
a U.S. grocery store chain
made the presentation
Why is being in charge of time management important?
How is being a staff member considered leadership?
the customer
Conducted an
What is "the Deal" - you can drop these 2 words and its still clear.
These points should have parallelism. In other words, if you start one point with a verb, you should start all points with a verb. If you start with an adjective, start all points with an adjective. Im not sure that you need this section and Im not sure that it should be entitled "other". 2 of the points are skills. 1 of the points is another role and the remainder point is an accomplishment.
Use action verb.
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The language is not bad. I would have a native English speaker look over it. Its a bit hard to mark up and reword stuff on Razume because the interface is geared more towards style than substance. I'm not familiar with the workings of Chinese institutions and the job market there, so I will not evaluate your resume based on those factors. Best of luck!
1) Dot format for dates is not clear.
2) Major GPA is BS. I wouldn't include it.
3) This format exagerates the short term nature of your tenure with different companies. I would try to figure out a different format (not skills based?) that doesn't make your exerpeince seem so jumpy.
4) Complementing that point, what are you trying to sell youself as? Get clear in your mind what are the 3 key skills you want this resume to promote. After you get clear on that, cut everything that doesn't support those points. Employers skim and you need to hit them quickly with what you're selling.